IELTS Advice: band 9 essays
Some students (both in my classes and online) find it hard to
believe that all of my essays are band 9. They are under the impression
that you need to use "difficult" language to get a high score. This is
how I respond:
- What is "difficult" language? Language is not mathematics; anyone can learn and understand a word or phrase.
- The most difficult thing is using words together correctly and naturally. Small words like articles and prepositions cause the most problems.
- If an essay has no grammar mistakes and a mix of long and short sentences, it's almost certain that it will get band 9 for grammar.
- If ideas are explained and developed in a clear, logical way, you will get a high score for coherence and cohesion.
- If you try to make your writing over-complicated, it will seem forced and unnatural.
Sample Essays
Essay Writing – Sample Essay 1
Do you think that Private Institutions Should be Banned? Discuss your options in 250 words.
Apropos of this statement, I am in
consummate discord with it. Private institutions should not be banned.
Because it will mean, abating the choices made by parents for the future
of their children. They may not get best education and quality of
studies in Government institution. Hence, life for bright students may
be downsized. Furthermore, consequences could be devastating for the
future of individual and perhaps for the whole nation.
On the other hand, there will be huge
positive impact on the way our Government Schools work if the private
institutions are banned. Once government institutions realize their
problems and shortcomings, quality of teaching and code of practice will
improve. As the code for conduct improve in the Government
institutions, their way of teaching will be more pragmatic. Also there
will definitely be profits from schools which will go in Government
Treasury once the private institutes are banned; hence the school
conditions will improve. These schools will then retrospect the
multi-religious culture and will teach students to be respectful towards
other religions. Parents will definitely benefit from this decision by
paying less tuition fees in Government institutions as compared to
private institutions. Furthermore, there will be sense of equality
between students and there will be exhibit of nor rich or poor in
schools.
Absence of private schools may become a
source of anguish in middle and high income people. It may be
misunderstood as a loss in freedom of choice as Government has taken the
right of choice form parents for their children education.
Some of the children who need special
education or attention need private education. For instance, people with
disabilities will be cared more in private institutions for their needs
as compared with Government Institutions. Similarly, blind or deaf
students also need special attention and care which in my option is
impossible to provide in Government institutions.
In nutshell, I would like to assert the
importance of private institutes in our community. Private institutions
cater needs for all type of students. They always change their teaching
styles and skills in accord to the demand of students, providing them
with high stands of education. So I strongly feel that private education
should not be banned.
Essay Writing – Sample Essay 2
As our nations are becoming stronger and more powerful economically, the quality of life seems to be improved. However, that is not actually true. We may think that we are healthy individuals and our off springs will be same, unfortunately that is just a mirage. As we look around us we find the poisons which will be polluting our generations to come. For instance alcohol and drugs are affecting our wellbeing. In accord to the statistics the percentage of smokers has risen to almost 17% in five years and that is a major cause of concern. And it is not unusual to understand that majority of lung and heart diseases are consequences of smoking. In addition to that, people who do not smoke actually are also smoking it is called as “Passive Smoking”. Recently Australia has implemented some regulations for smokers which is a relief to nonsmokers.
Choice of smoking is made freely and with
cognition of a smoker. However, since smoker is commensurately addicted
to smoking, providing warning on the cigarette pack is not enough.
Furthermore, Government should impose high taxes on cigarettes, so that
smoking addiction could be controlled in youngsters. But it is also a
fact that most of the Government’s revenue comes from cigarettes and
alcohol. If smoking is controlled then it is questionable, what will be
happening to the strong economy of that country? I believe there must be
equilibrium for this crisis.
Smokers can be considered as the high
risk people because of vulnerability of disease. Majority of people are
smokers with complications in lungs and heart. So it should be kept in
mind that these people will be expected to pay more for their treatment.
But there is actually a fine line between smokers and nonsmokers. For
instance, non smokers may have to pay enormous amount of money for
medical treatment, if the disease is serious.
I am in partial accord with this
statement. It is a possibility that smokers may have high medical
treatment bills, but it doesn’t necessary means non smokers bound to
have less complications and hence less medical expenses. The scenario
depends upon person to person and it may even vary from one nation to
another.
Essay Writing – Sample Essay 3
I am not in consummate accord with the
statement. Smoking is bad for health. But it is only on case to case
basis. Some of the people have been observed immune to the bad effects
of smoking. In accord to one research, some people can sustain the bad
effects of smoking and can live longer. However, some people can not
sustain the bad effects of smoking and therefore, the results can be
devastating.
People who could be severely effected by
smoking are more prone to heart and lung diseases. Paying for the
medical treatment should not be biased. Because it doesn’t matter if the
person is smoker or non-smoker, the problem in non-smoker could be
similar to a smoker. For example, a non-smoker could be “passive
smoker”. Also, even though the chances of getting heart and lung
diseases in smokers are high, it doesn’t mean that a non-smoker can not
have the similar disease. Reasons may vary from high cholesterol level
to lungs infection in non-smokers. Research has showed that a non-smoker
could also exhibit the same complications as a smoker reason being
non-smoker could be inhaling the smoke fumes from smokers.
In conclusion, I would like to state that
even though, majority of smokers are having complications because of
smoking but it does not necessarily mean that the non-smokers cannot
have the same problems. On this basis, I would assert that the medical
treatment should not be biased; it should be fair to anyone who needs
it. If the medical treatment is not fair, it could lead to more
casualties in smokers. As a consequence, it will leave a bad taste in
our community and then the riots will be inevitable.
Essay Writing – Sample Essay 4
I am in consummate accord with this
statement. Apropos of the statement, I strongly believe that medical
professionals and engineers must be paid more as compared to film
actors. By pragmatic cognizance, one can understand that doctors and
engineers are buttress of our society and economy.
Doctors and nurses are individuals who
not only work for a living, but also contribute to our society. They are
the people who can be regarded as “hands of God”. Reason being they
save our lives, hence make this planet better for living. If one really
wants to understand what it means to be a doctor, ask them, they will
tell that you must have a “heart of a lion and hands of a weaver” in
order to be a doctor. It is so true. Doctors and nurses improve our
quality of lives. They contribute to the community in ways different to
any other professions.
Similarly, teachers are also building
blocks of our society. They educate us in order to make us successful in
our professional and personal lives. Mentors make us realize our true
potential and our responsibilities as an individual. Personally
speaking, they are the messengers of angels who teach us how our life
should be. They give us sense of direction in life. They show us the way
to success.
Doctors, teachers and nurses are
undoubtedly the pillar of any nation. Therefore, it becomes imperative
to understand that they must be paid well in order to help build our
community not just for themselves but for the whole society. Doctors and
nurses should be paid according to their rank and their department.
Higher the precision required, higher should be the pay. Similarly,
teachers should be paid according to their rank and qualifications. And
one most important thing is to increment their salary every year to keep
them motivated.
On the contrary to these professions,
actors should not be paid huge amounts for their acting. Main reason
being apart of showing their sexuality, emotions and their violent
nature, they exhibit wrong ideas in our society. I feel they have a
limited contribution to our community as compared to any other
profession.
In a nutshell, I would like to assert
that doctors, teachers and nurses should be paid well as compared to
actors. The main reason is because doctors, teachers and nurses
contribute to our society constructively. On the other hand, film
industries actually contribute destructively in our community.
Essay Writing – Sample Essay 5
I am in consummate accord with this
statement. There is too much attention on keeping a pet even though
people throughout the world are starving. However, one cannot negate the
benefits of keeping pets. Pets are known to being harmony in families
and lives of people.
Pets are source of happiness and
recreation for people of all ages. Pets especially dogs may keep a
person fit, as it is important to take dogs for a walk. As we walk with
dogs we help ourselves to be fit. So, pets could be one reason to become
fit. Guide dogs are helpful to our community. Everyone knows the
significance of these specially trained dogs in lives of blind people.
Guide dogs act as eyes through which they see. Dogs are also known to
save lives, in some cases. At night dogs act like guards on patrol,
saving our houses from burglars.
Although there are benefits to keep pets,
but they could also be source of diseases. Viruses are known to be
present in animals and birds. By their droppings, these viruses can
travel places, infecting people which could lead to deaths in worst case
scenario. Some pets, like cats and parrots can be aggressive and
impulsive and it can result in instant attacks in people and can show
way to the hospital.
Loss of a pet can be devastating to
family members especially children. Pets have tendency to blend as a
family member, so loss of who can create the same effect as a loss of a
family member. As a consequence, it can lead to depression in young
children.
Having a pet could also mean that lots of
money will be spent on them. It is up to a person weather to keep a pet
or negate the idea of having one. Once it is decided to get a pet,
foremost things to do is to manage finances well in advance.
In the end, I would like to say that it
actually depends upon a person either to adopt a pet or give up the idea
of having one. Personally speaking, I would like to have a dog in
future, as I like myself to keep fit and I think it will enhance my
lifestyle.
Essay Writing – Sample Essay 6
Computers, televisions, internet, these are the must have
assets in our contemporary world. It seems that world without media
sources would come to halt instantaneously. However, if this is the case
I imagine how our ancestors would have survived all those years without
these information sources?
Computers nowadays are the major buttress
in any market, be it in financial sector, like offices or businesses or
stocks. It has definitely changed the world we live in. With invent of
this magnificent device, people have realized the benefits of
technology, which is to make lives easier and comfortable, in this
technological era. Even if you ask a 3 year old child how to operate a
computer, answer will definitely be positive.
Generally speaking, computers are helping
our communities in numerous ways. People have become more aware of
technology, resulting in increased cognizance. Computers are assisting
us in factories where operations are completely autonomous. In offices,
computers help us to manage our data and information. Thus, computers
have actually changed our world.
Having said that, in accord to some
researches done in America, there have been reports that using computers
are harmful to our wellbeing. According to annals published back in
2006, working on computers for long hours continuously, can lead to
stress and depression. In addition to that, people tend to gain weight
as they work on computers all day long. Further more, working on
computers for more than four hours can lead to decrease in eyesight. But
this is not all, by invent of internet; minors have easy excess to
explicit materials online. In addition to that, Email frauds are all
time high.
In my option, every technology has some
benefits and some drawbacks, just like the medical pills have side
effects. The power is ours because choice is ours, it depends upon us
which side to choose from, constructive side of technology or the
destructive side.
Essay Writing – Sample Essay 7
All people glorify and enthusiastically talk about human
virtues and morality yet few people actually live up to them. What is
your opinion? Do you agree or disagree?
Apropos to the above parable about
conversation and following human virtues and ethics I would like to
quote a proverb “Early to bed , early to rise makes a man healthy,
wealthy and wise” which people say but don’t follow. Do they really
represent what we called human nature, undoubtedly they are?
The answer is disparaging, depreciating
and moribund in true sense/pragmatic way. These garrulous, so called
high profiled people, lack principles themselves. They can be considered
as the quintessence of incorrigible liars .The examples of these people
can be found everywhere, take for instance, out esteemed politicians ,
they know how to convince people at the time of voting, but after
elections where are those promises, moralities and merits. Their talk is
really egregious but do they really apply all to themselves. Another
example can be had of those people who talk about banning fashion shows
as its is not up to intrinsic worth, but in reality they are the one who
watch these with full spread, question arises where is the morality
then, only in words?
Exceptions are always there, no qualms in
it but exceptions are rare. Stats indicate the out of 100 people approx
85 are not following what they are saying to others. So where is
morality, only in lectures? This tradition simply indicates that we are
camouflaging our weaknesses over our sins.
In the nutshell, we can say that if
forgiveness is divine why people are giving capital punishment to
others? People talk about human merits and principles but still they
don’t practice what they preach, isn’t it disgusting. They live on the
rules that, rules are for others not for themselves. In my opinion these
people are disgrace/stigma to society.
Essay Writing – Sample Essay 8
Should foreign languages be encouraged from kindergarten?
Nothing concrete can be had without
aspiration, inspiration, and perspiration. Language is a mode of
communication by which we can express our ideas, emotions etc. on a
piece of paper or otherwise. Apart from the native languages taught in
school and allied institutions I strongly feel that the foreign
languages should be encouraged from the kindergarten itself.
To illustrate my above mentioned
viewpoint, I would like to quote some examples. As we often know that
children’s are the backbone for any developing nation. So if they are
strong the nation will progress. If they know foreign languages they
won’t face any difficulty when ever they go abroad, and hence will
understand their culture and technology well. Secondly, we often talk
about global village of world, which is we consider the world as a
global village bonded by one single theme, love, so encouraging foreign
languages from the kindergarten itself will promote this theme as the
students/professionals won’t have any misconception regarding other
language.
To support my viewpoint further, I would
like to add that promoting foreign languages from the beginning will
help student learn new things, they will develop themselves into well
defined professionals and citizens. Even society will acknowledge them
as urbane elites. This will bring an ingenious attitude in them. They
won’t be feeling guilty if they come to face such a situation called
language barrier. Moreover this boosting of foreign language at the
kindergarten stage will generate a feeling of oneness and may simulate
foreign currency growth.
In the nutshell I can say that language
(written ,oral or symbolic) is the sole way to express yourself so
encouraging foreign language will not bring additional burden to
children or kindergartens but this will really help in proliferating
their carrier and undoubtedly strengthen a nation’s stronghold apart
from generating feeling of oneness.
Essay Writing – Sample Essay 9
Smoking in public places should be banned, what is your viewpoint, do you agree or disagree.
Ban on smoking in places is not only
justified but also imperative. Many countries are realizing the dangers
of passive smoking and are coming up with measures to curb the problems
popping up with the passive smoking.
Medical science has fully supported the
dangers of potential passive smoking. To illustrate my point I will like
to cite the fact that most of the people die due to cigarette smoking
which contains nicotine. Inveterate smokers pack up themselves with lung
and oral cancer rather than from natural causes. Government is
squandering astronomical sums for the treatment of pulmonary cancers and
educating the populace from the dangers of smoking .The imposition of
high taxes on nicotine based products has already been done to restrain
this habit.
The debatable point is that to what
extent these steps have been succeeded to dissuade the smokers.
Cigarette smoking not only pollutes the air but also make non-smokers
inhale the stale smoke imperiling their health too. Ingrained smokers
are not destroying their own health but also of others. The main
critical issue in this respect is that is anyone (child or adult) safe
from passive smoking. The doom of asthmatics, pregnant women can we well
imagined too.
Some smokers argue that banning smoking
in public places is direct impingement of their human rights but this
line is futile because right to smoking is not absolute, but right to
life is. Many persons unintentionally take up smoking by watching
others; thereby unleash the smoke in public places. This is what they
call fashion.
Thus it is imperative to impose
appropriate laws as it will not only prevent non-smokers from falling
victim to the dangers of passive smoking, but also directly benefit the
diehard smokers who would then have no choice but to curtail their
smoking habit.
Essay Writing – Sample Essay 10
Societies that don’t respect and honor their women can never
make progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree on this
statement.
Behind every successful man there is a
woman. In fact this statement can be generalized for a state, country or
a nation also that a country can never make progress if it didn’t
respect their women counterparts.
The prologue of this statement can be
attributed to simple questions: how will you distinguish between a
civilized and uncivilized person or in fact a developed or an
underdeveloped nation? Can one answer this question this by saying or
referring to his economic status or his rank. Well, unfortunately it is
no. The answer reclines in the reverence of their better halves. The
society which commits atrocities on their weaker members is not only
uncivilized but also underdeveloped as referred to developed and
civilized.
The brutalities done on women by men are
not their sign of strength by they are construed as the sign of their
weakness which they are camouflaging. Is the valor of men lies in
committing crimes on the weak hapless women? The question is still
debatable.
So why cant the societies who don’t
respect the women progress, because the intelligence and wisdom of women
is unique in every respect. By not acknowledging the efforts of women
and depriving them of their rights means improper motherhood for future
generations which hence weakens the society. Margaret Thatcher, Mother
Teresa, Florence Nightingale, Indira Gandhi, etc. these names don’t need
any words to prove themselves, they were the torch bearers and had
enlightened the lives of many. They represent the sublime face of
self-service and sacrifice.
To conclude, I would like to say that
women are the best gift ever gifted to man by the God. Dishonoring and
demonizing the women folks will not only invite the wrath of God, but
also disfigure him too. It is the women who give birth to man, so how
can he think of disrespecting the same and progress simultaneously.
Essay Writing – Sample Essay 11
Today in this modern contemporary world, people are striving
hard to earn their living and to have two square meals a day. In this so
called high profiled technological growth, people are suffering from
many problems and diseases. As the growth is proliferating so is the
problem of maligning image. Today the juveniles are suffering from what
is called eve-teasing.
Eve teasing is scaling rapidly
now-a-days. As per the dictionary meaning of eve-teasing it means
commenting on someone in order to make fun, or abashing him or her. This
problem has elevated now as compared to past. Question arises what is
the main cause of eve- teasing? Is it that we want to show that we are
superior to others? Or we just want to make fun of others. Well what
ever may be the reasons; this is really a bad aspect of human life that
we are treating others as inhumane.
The problem of eve teasing may be
attributed to the bad education scenario, because it is what the
education makes the human as humane. Today’s education scenario is such
like we have some hesitation in talking to people of other gender. We
are not taught how to behave with the members of other gender. Another
main factor which is contributing towards growing this menace is the
fashion of today. Today fashion is such that we are in volubly compelled
toward teasing. Last, but not least, as far as I am concerned I think
is the cinema which is responsible for some part of eve teasing. Movies
are not what they used to be, they are hampering the minds of people,
affecting their mentality and growth. People are becoming stoical, not
convivial. They are not of placating nature now.
In the nutshell we can say that eve
teasing is a becoming a serious problem now as population or penury.
People who undergo eve teasing may end up their life due to abashment.
Government should behave like a martinet and should imprison or impose
monetary implications on those who are responsible because everyone in
this world has the right to live without trepidations and tensions.
Essay Writing – Sample Essay 12
The human mind tries to find complex solutions to the simple problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree
Apropos to the above statement, I
consider this as human nature. We are connotating westernization to such
extent that we feel shame if we look ’simple’, this may be attributed
to what is called fashion.
Why we have tied ourselves into so many
kinks? Aren’t we have increased the complexities ourselves? In the
retrospect it was not so. People were simple and their lifestyle
matching to them so the problems were simple. The mind ‘thought’
accordingly.
Insight of this statement reveals the fact that we are ‘addicted’ to make mountain out of mole. The human nature is so complex that it makes complex solutions even to fairly easy problems. Even if there are no problems the mind tries to generate one and then visualizes it making it complex. An old saying that “empty vessels make much noise” is quite in this situation.
Insight of this statement reveals the fact that we are ‘addicted’ to make mountain out of mole. The human nature is so complex that it makes complex solutions even to fairly easy problems. Even if there are no problems the mind tries to generate one and then visualizes it making it complex. An old saying that “empty vessels make much noise” is quite in this situation.
To exemplify I would like to give some
examples. Suppose your food is not tasty, then mind will think why it is
not tasty and then it starts pondering over it making it complex
problem. Another instance can be had of overweight, overweight no doubt
is problem, but still mind make it more complex and you switch to
weight loss, dieting techniques and taking pills instead of ’simple’
exercising.
Furthermore going on the same track, I
would like to add the examples of ‘looks’ which are ‘euphermal’ but for
looks people are going to cosmetic or plastic surgeons for getting their
face lifted and for removing wrinkles. Question arises why they or
(human mind in particular) don’t understand the simple problem of aging
which is universal. Isn’t it the complex solution to a fairly simple
problem? Other examples may include weathering, insomnia etc which are
natural phenomenon but mind tries to find complex solutions to even
these natural and simple phenomenon’s and ‘problems’
In the nutshell, I can say that if you want to get rid of all the problems, count your blessing not your sins daily.
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